Why this is Band 9:
Conciseness: I removed the list of activity names in the introduction because they are mentioned in the body paragraphs. This saves roughly 20 words.
Synthesizing Data: Instead of describing every small dip (like the 2005 rise in Dramatics), I described the overall trajectory (“popularity waned,” “falling from… to”).
Strong Verbs: Words like “skyrocketed,” “waned,” and “hovering” convey complex movement in fewer words than “increased a lot” or “went down slowly.”
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